Gyrate
Bursting with bronze life
Trapped in stepmother’s glass shoes
Bones starving in flight.
Photo by Philpp Forster
Inspired by Eugi’s Weekly Prompt: round the world
Also inspired by Mindlovemisery’s Menagerie’s Photo Challenge #377
Yelling Rosa
Hi,
You have nice posts,
but I don’t know why I don’t see your Like Buttons.
Have a nice week 🙂
Jaya Avendel
Thank you! Yes, I am currently working on fixing my ‘Like’ button.
Dominic Alapat
Lovely poem! Especially the last line: ‘Bones starving in flight.’
Raji (@journeyintofantasy)
Fantastic piece as always Jaya! Love the new look of the website, congrats on going self-hosted!
Jaya Avendel
Thanks so much! Loving it so far. 🙂
Ingrid
I love the fairytale reference here!
glowsteady
This one has left me with so many questions!! I usually get a story from your writing (whether it’s the one you intended or not) and I didn’t from this one. But it still felt really powerful. I love the last line, even though I have no idea what it means. I know writing is often left open to interpretation but I’d love to know your inspiration for this one x
Sophie
Jaya Avendel
I imagined Cinderella as a stepmother. In the Snow White fairytale, the stepmother is condemned by dancing herself to death in a pair of iron shoes. Combined with my view of dancing as a way to fly, this poem is my vision of a woman in happy motion trapped within herself.
Thank you so much for sharing your questions and giving me a chance to share some of my inspiration!
Lisa's Notebook
I have to be honest, I’m not too sure of the meaning behind the first and third lines, but the stepmother’s glass shoes seems a lovely take on the Cinderella story 🙂 And congrats on going self-hosted, your site looks lovely!
Jaya Avendel
Thanks, Lisa, for sharing your reading experience and for noticing the new site!
Kelly Diane
Short but so so powerful
Della Driscoll
I can feel the power in this haiku, brilliant words!
lynnmumbingmejia
Beautiful haiku, Jaya! Happy to see you’ve got your domain now! Gorgeous words as always xx
Lynn | https://www.lynnmumbingmejia.com
Melissa Kacar
This is so a beautiful and thought provoking! As always, I love your word choices and the powerful imagery attached. Thank you for sharing this! I love your new website design and layout too! 🙂
Jaya Avendel
Thank you, Melissa!
Riana.AngCanning
Interesting! I’m not sure I quite “get” this one but I always love your word choice. They’re always so thought provoking – you do so much in so few words!
Charity
Such a powerful haiku my friend! Thanks so much for sharing!
Corinne
Love this, it’s such a powerful haiku, what feelings!
Corinne x
Unwanted Life
Have you gone self hosted? Your site looks a lot different to how it usually does. Your new look does look great!
For me, bronze life implies old and agile, like rust cause by corrosion and oxidation. Being trapped in the glass shoes of a stepmother also implies the fragile nature of stepping into the role of mother of someone’s else’s children. I’m not sure if this was what you were going for, but that’s where it led my thoughts
Jaya Avendel
Yee! So happy you noticed; I have indeed gone self-hosted. Still working on perfecting it, but am loving it. <3
Thank you for sharing your lovely interpretation of this poem!
Lucy
Oh wow! I can feel the imagery and each word, it breaks my heart. It is very delicate with the glass imagery along with that desire to run away from it all. Such clear, beautiful, and evocative feelings in this piece.
Jaya Avendel
Thank you, Lucy, for your lovely read!
paeansunplugged
Oh, my! This can be interpreted in so many ways. A wealth of meaning in your haiku.
Michele Lee
Jaya, this is fantastic! You are a master at creating incredible scenery, stories, and lasting memories in just a few words.
jayaavendel
Thank you so much, Michele!
Michele Lee
My pleasure!
lifestyleseason
Amazing poem! It’s so powerful and interesting! Also, I love how the picture adds to the meaning!
Jeff Flesch
Fantastic, poem, Jaya. I get the emotion behind trying to be someone other than who we truly are. A lovely haiku.
-Eugi ☕️
Fascinating haiku, my friend. My mind floated around your lines several times and I love it! Bravo!
summer with monika
Concision, perception… I can feel the moment in your haiku