Today, a Waterfall
Slippery along the rocky ridges of my
throat, spring water floods the crystalline
base of my heart.
Trickling, it fills the
pool, the womb
I follow its path with my
breath, alive to the worlds grinding
in my joints, the ache in my
skeletal dreams, the riverbed
of my corpse.
Photo by lucas mendes
Resa
Lovely, Layla.
Water is a liquid thread.
Have a great week!
Pooja Mahimkar
Beautifully written
navasolanature
That sounds or feels like a walk too far! Love the water and then the almost deadly aches. Quite a contrast.
Karima Hoisan
Oh my Joni this poem took me by surprise as I slipped down your waterfall to a very unexpected ending. I love it!
Yelling Rosa
Well done 👍
Belladonna
Wow this was deep!!!!!
Annabel
You wrote so impressively and profoundly, with uttermost poetic sensitivity and tenderness! I resonate with this piece of yours deeply, Layla.
rothpoetry
Beautiful images in your poem, Layla.
Layla Todd
Thank you, Dwight!
rothpoetry
You are welcome.
AAIC
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theusedlife
Beautiful imagery, Layla. Well done!
Layla Todd
Thank you! 💕
Susi Bocks
Wow, this piece has such beautiful layers, Layla! For me, it’s the full emotional bodily response to something big occurring in our lives. Well done!
Layla Todd
Thank you so much for sharing these reflective thoughts, Susi! 💕
Susi Bocks
You’re welcome, dear Layla! <3
da-AL
gorgeous! apologies if I already did invited you – your writing is utterly gorgeous & would be thrilled if you’d guest blog post at my site! If you think it might be fun or helpful to have my followers meet you, here’s the link for general guidelines: https://wp.me/p6OZAy-1eQ – da-AL
Layla Todd
Hi da-AL, thank you for the invitation! I will be sure to check it out. 💕
da-AL
Wonderful. Please email if you have questions. ContactdaAL@gmail.com
Ka Malana - Fiestaestrellas.com
I so enjoy your collection of sensory elements in your poems. The “like” button isn’t loading for me. This has happened for me on your page before, and I don’t know why. I am on my PC so it’s not that its the problem of my mobile phone.
When you say, “I follow its path with my breath [referring to the waterfall]” it’s…. infused with movement downwards as the waterfall pools in the womb. Simply beautiful. “The riverbed of my corpse” is a striking ending. I can see the texture.. appreciating the visuals you elicit to create this textured and moving effect, even after death–the imprint remains.
Layla Todd
Wow, thank you, Ka, for sharing your thoughts on this piece and the ways in which it connected with you! 💕
Molly | Transatlantic Notes
This is beautifully written and very evocative to read. Thank you for sharing this, it’s lovely to read poetry like this!
Layla Todd
Thank you for reading, Molly! 💕
Lisa Orchard
Love the poem. It brings to me images of hiking in the woods and the feel of my muscles and bones moving in time with each other.
Layla Todd
Thank you, Lisa! 💕
Pooja G
Wow, really enjoyed the poem!
Akhila
Loved this Layla. felt like you are leaving it to reader’s interpretations
barbaraleaver
Lovely piece that gets thoughts flowing!
Ingrid
Startlingly beautiful imagery, Layla!
paeansunplugged
Amazing imagery, Layla!
Frank @ Beach Walk Reflections
Beautifully written and wonderful imagery. Personally, I love the way you incorporate multiple aspects of the body. Your words deliver a cacophony of feelings that tossed me over the waterfall because I was unsure where it was taking me. But, that’s a good thing. 🙂
Layla Todd
Thank you so much, Frank, for sharing your thoughts! 💕
Amy
I admit I had to read this poem a couple of times for it is deep. I think the interpretation is up to the individual and in this case for me I see both pain and healing flowing as water flows.
Layla Todd
Thank you, Amy! Love that you sat with this piece a while. 💕
Baydreamer - Lauren Scott
How beautiful, Layla! I’ll echo what others have said that your way with words and imagery is stunning! 🩷
Layla Todd
Thank you deeply, Lauren! 💕
Jennifer Pentland
Very creative! It painted a vivid image in my mind. 👏👏
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SelmaMartin
Layla. This is beautiful.
Dawn Pisturino
Such vivid imagery, Layla!
D. Wallace Peach
Your imagery is so rich, Layla. This poem is beautiful, my friend.
Layla Todd
Thank you, Diana! 💕
Eugi
Oh, such a lovely cascade of words, Layla.
Keep Calm & Drink Coffee
This poem has the same disruptive power as water and gives a sense of purification as well as pain.
THANK YOU Layla!
Layla Todd
Thank you for reading, Claudia! 💕
Keep Calm & Drink Coffee
<3
Mike U.
Honestly, it’s a singular joy to read your poetry. You have such a masterfully creative way with words and imagery. This poem is both surreal and gorgeous. Brilliant writing, my friend! 🙂
Layla Todd
Thank you for spending time with my work, Mike. 💕
Bartholomew Barker
Great ending! (BTW, I couldn’t “Like” this post. It just shows “Loading…” I tried refreshing the page, just in case, but no luck.)
clcouch123
Wow, the braid is beautiful. It certainly comes across, rather cascades, as “spring water.” The verse rightly challenges what might too easily assumed about spring and water. Sometimes what flows through us is too much.
Layla Todd
Thank you for sharing your thoughts! 💕
Jacqui Murray
My joints ache–but not for the same reason!
clcouch123
I hear you!
Layla Todd
Thanks for chiming in, Jacqui! 💕