Shedding Firework
I smoldered on with smoke for a veil that
Hid the blaze in my eyes.
Night alighted upon my hair
I twined it through my fingers and
Warped it into bracelet.
Moonlight drove the flame from my eyes
I felt the heat roil through me and
Thread my ribs with ash.
The beacon turned to flame inside my heart and
Broke my chest apart.
Diaphanous smoke lit with lost dream and fervent wishes
I screamed free
In burning midnight air
I erupt with the last dependence left in me.
Photo by Spenser Sembrat
Lauren
This is a great piece Jaya! I love the imagery you create with your words! Thank you for sharing.
Lauren
Keep Calm & Drink Coffee
I am particularly struck by the conclusion: the exploding addiction.
A strong sense of liberation came to me: addictions are too often negative and enslave us, so it is wonderful to be able to think of eliminating them by transforming them into an explosion, but also in the spectacular light of fireworks.
Jaya Avendel
Thank you, Claudia! I love the depth with which you read this poem.
Jenny in Neverland
Beautifully written, those last two lines were powerful!
Jeff Flesch
The feelings you describe in this write are painful and simultaneously hopeful, showcasing a paradox of human beingness, which is both powerful and beautiful. Gorgeous write, Jaya!
Jaya Avendel
Thank you, Jeff, for sharing this sensitive, faceted read!
Jeff Flesch
You’re most welcome, Jaya. It’s always my pleasure!
rothpoetry
Beautifully done! I love all of your great descriptive imagery as you entwine fireworks and emotions.
judeitakali
Gorgeous and evocative poetry.🤩🤎
balroop2013
Thank you for nudging me over here Jaya. your poetry is beautiful and thought-provoking.
Jaya Avendel
Thank you, Balroop!
Narayan Kaudinya
Strong, and almost bare. Jaya !
johncoyote
Amazing poetry my friend. The reader could feel the emotions in the words.
LaShelle
Ugh this is BRILLIANT! So deliciously written and delectable lines!
Jaya Avendel
Thank you, LaShelle!
LaShelle
ABSOLUTELY
Ritisha G 🖤✨
Beautiful ❣️❣️❤️ 😍
Daphny Aqua
Loving this poem Jaya. 💞
D. Wallace Peach
That was lovely and powerful. I loved the expanded theme of dependence and independence. Beautiful imagery, Jaya.
Jaya Avendel
Thank you! Love that you enjoyed the expanded theme of dependence and independence.
Nancy Richy
Jaya, your poetry is glorious, something unexpected from someone so young. I loved this piece! 🫶🏼 🌟
Jaya Avendel
Thank you, Nancy! 😍
Deeksha Bhardwaj
Powerful poem, Jaya👏🏼
ivor20
Smoke gets in our eyes
Flames burn our souls
Miriam
Powerful and evocative writing
Jaya Avendel
Thank you! I am delighted you felt it, Miriam!
Michele Lee
Oh wow, a unique perspective and transformed twist to the typical independence-themed poem. Well done, Jaya! 🎆
Jaya Avendel
Thank you, Michele! I am delighted you enjoyed this 4th of July poem.
Jodie | That Happy Reader
So much imagery in this one Jaya! I love it!
Jacqui Murray
There’s a lot to this one, Jaya. Nice!
Ingrid
A poem of power and fire, Jaya! 🔥