Since Becoming A Writer
The ripples on the pond tell a story
Each frigid lap of green copper water
Is breath to the white-gold fish
If I were Russian, I would dive in
Oxygen bubbles disrupted
Me, the ice in the champagne flute.
If I were the wind, I would swim
Snapping turtle with amber eyes a
Shadow beneath me.
The snow stings my toes
Plasters my nails with white chocolate hearts.
Six thousand, seven hundred, and eight trees
In my immediate view. I counted them
Floating in the breeze while the
Sun kissed my lips.
Not one perfect tree among them
The dendrologists say but
Artists find every limb worthy of watercolor.
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Gemma Cantan
Beautiful piece. Thank you for sharing 🙂
Love and Literature
Beautiful imagery and so creative! Thank you for sharing Jaya x
Dominic Alapat
Your like button isn’t working. This is a sublime poem I enjoyed reading!
Jaya Avendel
Thanks for letting me know! I am working on getting that fixed . . . 🙃
Jade Edge
Beautiful piece 🙂
CristinaR
Loved this Jaya! My favorite verse must be ‘ If i would be the wind, I would swim’. I can resonate so much with it x
Her Digital Coffee
This is such a beautiful piece. I love the detail and descriptions that you include. It really immerses the reader into that world and makes you feel as though you are right there. I got chills reading this, both from how incredibly written this is, as well as your descriptions of the cold. Thank you for sharing!
Jaya Avendel
Thank you for sharing your beautiful interpretation of this poem!
Molly @ Transatlantic Notes
I definitely felt some chills reading this — you’re evocative creativity is such a gift!
The Clockwork Reader
Beautiful Piece. Reading them was a pleasure!
Eri Tz
Beautiful images created in my thoughts while reading your poem. The pace carries me along to a magical place. Thank you ❤️
Jaya Avendel
Thank you! I am delighted and honored you felt transported reading this.
Kelly Diane
This is such a beautiful piece. It gave me chives down my spine. Nature is so amazing in every form.
Corinne
I love this piece, it’s so calming to read.
Corinne x
Lisa's Notebook
Gorgeous piece of writing, Jaya. My favourite is the last verse – it’s so true, just because something doesn’t meet technical criteria doesn’t mean it hasn’t got it’s own beauty and unique characteristics 🙂
Anika
Beautiful words! I love the link to nature, especially water, in this one. It really does hold and reflect stories. Thanks for sharing, Jaya!
Alicia Thompson
Hello, WOW your thoughts around nature are gorgeous and I really enjoyed reading it within this piece. Thank you for sharing such a wonderful piece of content. Alicia
Jeff Flesch
Ah, the beauty in the stillness, the glory we see, when we are watching, and creating. Lovely verse, Jaya.
Jaya Avendel
Much gratitude, Jeff! <3
Jeff Flesch
You’re welcome, Jaya. Always! 💙
Michele Lee
Jaya, this is gorgeous! Such an intimate connection to nature and an understanding of its perfection, as illustrated in the last line. 🎨 💖
Jaya Avendel
Thank you, Michele, for loving this piece!
Michele Lee
My pleasure. 💚
cafebeauty2021
Love the details in this line: “Six thousand, seven hundred, and eight trees.” Really brings the poem alive, thank you for sharing!
Mary Wanjiru
Beautiful, beautiful writing!
Jaya Avendel
Thank you so much, Mary!
barbaraleaver
Your observations of nature are beautiful. I can see the artists colours
Jaya Avendel
Thank you for your lovely read of this piece. 🙂