Of the Beholder
I pound my feet against the earth
Golden bangles scrap against silver
Arms thrust wide
Tears streak the dust from my face.
You capture my freedom in
The cage of your painting but
Leave it untitled so others
May project their meaning
Into your colors.
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Dominic Alapat
A beautiful poem with such imagery and evocative lyricism!
lynnmumbingmejia
Loved this so much! Beautifully written as always! Thanks for sharing, Jaya xx
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bournemouthgirl
This is such an interesting piece. Such emotion in this piece, a great play on words. Thank you for sharing.
Lauren -bournemouthgirl.com
cafebeauty2021
It’s a lovely poem, I really like the imagery involved. Thank you for sharing!
Loren
Ohh, love the idea that she may aware of her existence but stuck within a painting with no way out. People judging and looking, projecting their ideas onto her but never seeing her as is.
Thanks for sharing this powerful poem!
Jenny in Neverland
Oh wow I love this. It gives a new meaning to the phrase “beauty is in the eye of the beholder” for sure x
Keep Calm & Drink Coffee
“Leave it untitled so others
May project their meaning
Into your colors.”
Personally I always find shades of my colors into your words because you are able to describe sensation that I feel mine as well.
But your colors are the special ones and make the difference!
Jaya Avendel
Thank you so much, dear!
Keep Calm & Drink Coffee
<3
glowsteady
This is brilliant! I love the second half, very powerful. You capture a moment so beautifully.
Gabriela Marie Milton
A wonderful piece Java. Thank you for sharing.
xoxo
Raji (@journeyintofantasy)
I love this piece, particularly the second stanza and the title is such a perfect fit too! Thanks for sharing Jaya!
Della Driscoll
Powerful words, I really felt that! You’re such a talented writer xx
Corinne
I adore that second half. Reminds me of a girl moulding herself into the ideals of others.
Corinne x
taurusingemini
Using the self, to make the possibilities of others, a reality, this is, the ultimate, kind of, selfless, giving…
Jaya Avendel
Beautifully said!
Ingrid
‘You capture my freedom in
The cage of your painting’
– that’s how I feel about photography too. I hate being photographed. And others add their interpretations to art in the same way they do to poetry. So well-observed!
Jaya Avendel
Loving your comparison of this piece to being photographed! Thank you, Ingrid.
Ingrid
You’re welcome Jaya 😊
Michele Lee
Many thoughts evoked from your poem, Jaya. First, I love the visual of tears streaking dust on a face. Your poem also reminded me of the book, The Portrait of Dorian Gray, specifically the first two lines of the second stanza. Enjoyable read!
Jaya Avendel
Oo, thank you for sharing your thoughts, Michele, and a powerful book!
Michele Lee
You are most welcome, Jaya. Yes, great book!
Jeff Flesch
My, that is powerful, raw, and beautiful. I love the imagery you create with the concept of projecting onto the caged canvas. A wonder, Jaya.
Jaya Avendel
Thank you, Jeff, for your incredible read!
Jeff Flesch
You’re welcome, Jaya, always!
ivor20
Vividly emotional, a masterly crafted painting ..
barbaraleaver
This piece brings to mind how an artist interprets what they feel and see in a portrait
Lucy
WOW, this feels so profound in my bones. It’s chilling especially this:
“You capture my freedom in
The cage of your painting but
Leave it untitled so others
May project their meaning”
Beautiful verse. It’s evocative to me.
Jaya Avendel
Thank you, Lucy! I enjoyed playing with the words in this piece until they clicked. 🙂
Frank @ Beach Walk Reflections
You captured emotion and left us wondering …. now that’s a good combination. Well done, Jaya. Have a good weekend.
Jaya Avendel
Thank you, Frank! The same to you. 🙂
Monica St Hillaire
Jaya, I love this piece… So powerful!!!
Jaya Avendel
<3 Thank you so much!