Aura
He told me to light a fire upon my brow. I lit it with a colorless spark taken from his heart. From beneath my skin, bone grew towards the warmth and erupted into crown.
Before the last notes of his song died upon the wind, they came for the gold shining brighter than the sun. They tore themselves open on the stag point tips, bled wicked across an empire birthed from leftover palette.
The lady elephant evolved to be tuskless. She shed her whalebones and wandered free in regret the cost of life is more salt than carried in the ocean. When I look closely at her, I see myself. The gold no longer shines brighter than the sun for it is moonlight now, visible only in the blackest of night where the absence of color slithers velvet over your skin.
Photo by David Taffet
Dominic Alapat
Excellent writing! Beneath the apparent disconnectedness of this piece, there is meaning that coheres together and makes perfect sense! Almost every line is so good! I particularly liked: ‘She shed her whalebones and wandered free in regret the cost of life is more salt than carried in the ocean.’
KK
What an imagery and thought provoking piece!!!
Simplyalexjean
Jaya you always have a way with words – reading this brought images to life in my mind! Thank you for sharing this lovely piece
Kelly Diane
Such a deep and powerful piece Jaya. It gave me chills as I read it, there’s just so much emotion.
Karalee
There is a lot of emotion in this & I do like that it is a darker piece.
Jeff Flesch
A cacophony of emotions, and a pure delight to read and experience. I love the reflective magic you weave and the connections between human beingness and nature. This here, “She shed her whalebones and wandered free in regret the cost of life is more salt than carried in the ocean.” Is magic. Lovely, Jaya. 💙
Jaya Avendel
Thank you kindly, Jeff! Always love your comments 🥰
Jeff Flesch
You’re most welcome, Jaya! Always a joy to read you. ❤️
gemmaajaynee
I feel the darkness and emotion in these words. As always so beautifully written, you have a magical way with words xx
femaleoriginal
“I lit it with a colorless spark taken from his heart.” – I love the darkness of this piece, Jaya. Beautiful writing, as always!
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Jess Kart
This one seems deeper, darker, almost sad, but like most of your work… captivating. What is it? I sense heartbreak and inability to cope with a tragedy. This one deserves a follow up!
Btw, “The gold no longer shines … slithers velvet over your skin” is mighty fine writing.
Loved it! xx
Jaya Avendel
Thank you so much, Jess!
A Sustainably Simple Life
I feel like there is depth to this one that my brain isn’t even able to grasp. This is the line that will stick with me for a while: “Before the last notes of his song died upon the wind…” So often this is the way the world moves, isn’t it?
Jaya Avendel
Thank you for sharing how these words connected with you!
Melissa Kacar
This is such a powerful piece, I felt so impacted by the lines “From beneath my skin, bone grew towards the warmth and erupted into crown.” and “The gold no longer shines brighter than the sun for it is moonlight now, visible only in the blackest of night where the absence of color slithers velvet over your skin.” I reread it several times because it was just so thought provoking! The story you are telling is so vivid and beautifully written, thank you for sharing this!
Jaya Avendel
Love your thoughts, Melissa!
Richie
Hi Jaya,
Another moving piece of work, although perhaps a little darker than some of it’s predecessors. Beautiful nonetheless 🙂
summer with monika
All of my senses come alive when I read you… thank you!
Anika
I love the atmosphere created with your prose, very sombre but striking!
Soffy
Wow Jaya! That was such a thought provoking read! Amazing as always!
Jodie | That Happy Reader
This is an insightful piece Jaya! That last line just grabs me. Thanks for sharing.
Michele Lee
Jaya, your first paragraph left me speechless. The phrases, the message, the emotion, the imagery… outstanding. You could have stopped there and had a powerful post, but I am glad you kept going because it is a fantastic read!
Jaya Avendel
Often I do not stop where I later wish I had, or I stop too soon, so I love that you felt this piece complete in its present form!
Michele Lee
I can relate. 😊 Your piece is perfectly developed and contained.
Corinne
Love the darkness in this. It’s hauntingly beautiful!
Corinne x
Jaya Avendel
Thank you, Corinne!
isabellevitanyc
Your poetry is always incredible to read. “I lit it with a colorless spark taken from his heart” provides such vivid, amazing imagery and I love your descriptions!
Jaya Avendel
Thank you so much for your vivid read!
Her Digital Coffee
This is such a stunning piece. I love the descriptions. I could feel the wind and visualize the colors slowly disappearing into black. As always, the image is so fitting! Thank you for sharing your work.
Ingrid
The imagery here is stirring and disturbing!
paeansunplugged
“She shed her whalebones and wandered free in regret the cost of life is more salt than carried in the ocean”…such a deep and thought provoking line.
jessica
although this was short it was incredible to read. thank you for sharing
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barbaraleaver
To me this is a fantastic point of view on the world at large. I can feel the emptiness of environmental loss.