Unwilling
Sitting bowed under
A curtain of sorrow I
Cannot see the dawn.
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Sitting bowed under
A curtain of sorrow I
Cannot see the dawn.
Photo by Joao Silas on Unsplash
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Dominic Alapat
Beautiful poem Jaya! Conveys a sense of pain and pathos in just a few words, and makes you empathise with the victim!
Diffusing the Tension
This definitely makes me think of sadness and fear. Another very well-written poem!
Kelly Diane
Wow such powerful words. They gave me chills.
Unwanted Life
This makes me want to ask if you’re ok, as the poem represents depression so well
Helen's Journey
My 1st Mothers Day here in the UK without my departed Nan. So these words reaonated with me today for sure. Thank you. Helen
Jaya Avendel
Thank you for finding connection between my poem and your life. Happy Mother’s Day!
Zineb
These are really great words, they bring out emotions.
Jaya Avendel
Thank you for your simple and sweet words.
bournemouthgirl
So emotional!
Nancy
This really resonated with me. When you are in a certain mindset, it is hard to see things the right way. Kind of reminds me of Birdbox, you know things are bad but you can’t see them. Thanks for sharing this piece!
Nancy ♥ exquisitely.me
Jaya Avendel
It is hard to look outside the box sometimes! I find it scary but worth it.
Sophie Wentworth
Excellent choice of photo here! There’s something about it that really adds to the sadness of the poem, beautiful combination x
Sophie
Jaya Avendel
Thank you so much!
Lisa's Notebook
I don’t know why but that picture combined with those words made me think of all the families in Syria and how many of them quite literally never see the dawn. You write so well, Jaya, thank you for sharing this x
Jaya Avendel
Wow, what an interesting think to draw from this poem! Thank you for sharing your thoughts!
myexpressionofthoughtsblog
You have beautiful blog
Jaya Avendel
Thank you! It brings me happiness to know people enjoy reading what I have to say.
myexpressionofthoughtsblog
I truly did
Megha's World
Sad to read but well written Jaya.
Jaya Avendel
I am glad you enjoyed it. It was inspired by an article on child brides around the world.
Megha's World
Oh.. that social evil has always tugged at my heart.I have written an anthology on the social evils and it was one of the topic.
Jaya Avendel
I am not surprised so many people choose to write about it. It is something that deserves to be brought to the attention of the world.
Megha's World
Yes, exactly.