Gallery
Kiss me more
In the lamplight, love,
The moths as our only witness
I taste the iron on your lips
Small cruelties flicker in your eyes
Love, kiss me more.
Door knocker brass
Curls around my heart
Copperhead snake injects his poison
I flower, black, without you
Longing for a lone white petal.
Give me your heart
Under the moon, love
Summer vases as our only witness
I taste petrichor on your tongue
You taste ash on mine
Love, give me your heart.
Picture frame gold
Curls the ends of my mouse brown hair
Scarlet shoes in the corner
Shadows slant inward the wrong way
I stare vacantly at you
Lost without backstory.
Give me the lilies
Beside the honeysuckle bower, love
Wasps as our witness
I want the individuality
Crisp in the corners of your heart
Love, give me the lilies.
Lonely in company
I hang my heart in silence
I feel the walls throb
The windows give in to agony
Crack a little.
Dust along your ridges
A blotted shadow in the corner of your eye
The artist’s hand dabbed away your sorrow
I attempt to look at you
My eyes slide along the wall
Us, a collection of daubed watercolors.
Photo by Pedro Ramos on Unsplash
Inspired by the #7DayTale June prompt on Twitter: in the picture.
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Dominic Alapat
Such a beautiful love poem! And the form you’ve created for this is amazing!
Jaya Avendel
Thank you! This is one of my favorite layouts. 🙂
summer with monika
The iron, the flesh, the flowers… goosebumps reading this!
Jaya Avendel
The words you chose to respond to give this piece an entirely new meaning. Thank you!
summer with monika
I think it’s the hallmark of a great piece that it inspires interpretation!
Prakaash inspiration
Excellent post.
Lucy
So beautiful, dark, soulful, and amazing. I’m in awe once again. I also love the repetition in the word love, it makes this piece so haunting and it really gets to me like that. Such amazing and heartfelt work. ❤️❤️❤️
Jaya Avendel
Thank you, Lucy, for sharing what made this piece click with you!
aimsysantics
This is just a wonderful piece Jaya. It goes so well with the photograph as well. It really reminds me of the books that Victoria Hislop writes, and like them, you can really feel the emotion coming through! Think this is one of my favourites from you!
Aimsy xoxo
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Jaya Avendel
Thank you so much, Aimsy! I am touched my writing reminded you of another author. 🙂
Kelly
This is written so beautifully!
femaleoriginal
I loved the format of this piece! It really impacted the rhythm of it as I was reading 🙂 x
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Della Driscoll
What a gorgeous poem, I felt all the emotions poured into this xx
Margarida Vasconcelos (@daisyandthyme)
What a beautiful poem, Jaya. It intrigued me, I read it several times, I was completely absorbed by it. I love the way you write, beautiful.
Diana
Such a visual masterpiece, Jaya. I loved the depth of love in this and the ache to feel love. Beautiful array of words. Stay blessed ❤️❤️💐🙏
Jaya Avendel
Thank you, Diana, for your lovely read!
Love and Literature
This is so beautiful Jaya! x
Alison
I love the lines “as our only witness.” It invokes the thought of an intimacy between two people that have no care for any other eyes on them because the focus is just the two of them. Others have commented on the feeling of longing and I feel that within your words here too
Jaya Avendel
Thank you so much, Alison, for your soulful read!
gemmaajaynee
I really love this poem! It is absolutely beautiful and a feel good summer piece, full of emotion! Thank you for sharing xx
Jaya Avendel
Summer is a star in this piece for sure! 😊
Charity
Oh I love this one! I also love the format of how you wrote it too. So good!
Thecaskconnoisseur
Absolutely beautiful, completely melts your heart every time you read it 😁
Anika
I love the format/layout of this, really adds to the speed and emotion of your words. I also love the romantic tone to this! I’m a romance reader so the sense of longing and affection in the tone really appeals to me. Beautiful poem!
Jaya Avendel
Thank you, Anika! I like to image the format represented the gallery wall in a metaphorical way. <3
ellegracedeveson
I say this every time but you just have a way with words. Another beautiful piece! Xo
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Keep Calm & Drink Coffee
Door knocker brass
Curls around my heart
Copperhead snake injects his poison
I flower, black, without you
Longing for a lone white petal.
This is my favorite part. To be black without the one we love. To long for a white part. That part that makes the difference, that part that breaks the black. That part that can cure the copper poison.
THANK YOU SO MUCH DEAR JAYA!
Jaya Avendel
Yes! So well said, Claudia! The parallels you find in the black and white and cure to the copper enchant me. Thank you for sharing.
Keep Calm & Drink Coffee
Thanks to YOU for the beauty of your Words
Lisa's Notebook
The two standout phrases for me are, “Small cruelties flicker in your eyes” and “The windows give in to agony Crack a little.” Just so evocative. Beautiful piece of writing, Jaya, thank you x
Jaya Avendel
Thank you, Lisa!
GWT
To have this level of flourish with words. Just mesmerizing!
Jaya Avendel
Thank you so much! <3
Jenny in Neverland
This is so beautiful, Jaya. So much feeling and emotion in one poem!
Michele Lee
Jaya, this an epic untraditional love poem. I want to sit with this one and pour over each stanza, absorbing and interpreting each creative phrase and vivid description. Fantastic!
Jaya Avendel
Thank you, Michele! Your words tap on my heart. I love the way you read this. 😍
Michele Lee
You are most welcome, Jaya. It is always a pleasure to read your creative expression.💖
eob2
A word witch indeed, Jaya. This is beautiful filled with emotion for a moment remembered and living in it. 💖
Jaya Avendel
<3 Thank you for sharing your beautiful thoughts!
eob2
You’re most welcome. 😊💙
Jeff Flesch
Wow, love intertwined. A lovely piece, Jaya.
Gabriela Marie Milton
Beautiful piece Java.
xoxo
johncoyote
Reblogged this on johncoyote and commented:
Amazing poetry shared by a talented writer.
johncoyote
Amazing poetry dear friend.
Ingrid
I feel the yearning in this Jaya. Excellently captured!