For The Darkness
A ray of dark creeps
Through the dawn cutting slices
To take home below.
Photo By James BO Insogna
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femaleoriginal
This is so dark and creepy to me but I absolutely loved it! x
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bloglifewitherica
The imagery when I close my eyes. I love how your poems make me feel. The words always remind me of something personal.
xo Erica
Jaya Avendel
Love your reading of this! Thank you for sharing.
aimsysantics
Oh, I love this one Jaya! It just makes me think of the transition from day to night, but I saw a comment above about Persephone and Hades and can totally see it in this verse too!
Aimsy xoxo
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Jenny in Neverland
Oooh this feels really dark to me!
nortoncharity
Oh this is so dark and creepy but I enjoyed it so much! Thanks for sharing it!
Raji (@journeyintofantasy)
I really like this one! It’s so simple, but the imagery is amazing!
nianni
Really simple but it paints a really clear picture. Nice one. 😃
sejal
Great poem, I love the imagery! My favorite part is the “dawn cutting slices”. What inspired this poem? Thanks for sharing!
Jaya Avendel
This poem was inspired by the greek myth of Persephone and Hades. 🙂
Riana.AngCanning
I like the idea of a ray of dark. You always hear about a ray of sunshine but it’s cool to think about the darkness in rays too. Great work!
Jaya Avendel
Thank you!
Kayleigh Zara
I absolutely love the first sentence of this one, it’s so poetic x
Diffusing the Tension
I read in a comment that you were inspired by Greek mythology. The Hades/persephone story was always one of my favorites. Keep up the great work!
Jaya Avendel
I always love meeting a fellow comment-reader! Thank you.
Laura
I love the ‘dawn cutting slices’ line. It’s so poignant yet beautiful. It’s amazing what you can do with words!
Laura / https://www.laustworld.com/
Jaya Avendel
Thank you! I love playing with words.
Nancy
I really like this one. When we think of below, we think about darkness. The way you describe it hits home run!
Nancy ♥ exquisitely.me
Jaya Avendel
The Greek myth about Persephone and Hades inspired this one! Thank you.
Mytwosentences
Absolutely love this. Fantastic imagery.
Jaya Avendel
I particularly enjoyed writing this piece. Thanks for enjoying!