Broken Eyes
His eyes bleed into my heart
Jolting me to see the wounds
I have caused and struggle to heal.
His body said one thing
But his soul said another.
To see his spirited scattered
Across the floor of his heart
Broke my resolve and
Put it back together
Twice as strong.
Support my writing by becoming a patron!
itshannahcatherine
Incredible! You are very talented. What beautifully sad words.
Jaya Avendel
Loving your read of this! Thank you for sharing.
bloglifewitherica
This reminds me of something personal. Thank you for sharing.
lynnmumbingmejia
Aw, such an emotional and heavy piece! This reminds me of two exes who broke up due to the relationship not working out even though they continued to love each other then seeing each other for the first time. Thank you for sharing xx
Lynn | https://www.lynnmumbingmejia.com
Jaya Avendel
A touching story! Love the parallel to my poem.🥰
Stephanie
This made me so emotional! It reminds me a lot of the poetry I wrote when I actually.. wrote poetry. I haven’t picked that up in so long, but you’re inspiring me to do so again.
Jaya Avendel
I am delighted to have inspired you! May the words flow. <3
Jenny in Neverland
Oh wow, this certainly painted a vivid picture. Amazing piece x
simplynelbelle
What a beautiful poem. It’s really striking and authentic. You can definitely visualize the situation of two lovers going through a difficult situation.
Ruth| Ruthiee loves Glamour
Jaya! This poem is lovely and it has a spot in my heart. It reminded me of how we are most times when we are going through one challenge or the other we act like everything’s fine but our soul says different and deep down we know we are a complete wreck. This poem spoke to me in so many different ways some in which I can’t even put down. Just like every one of your poems, I loved this and it really spoke to me. Beautifully written x
Jaya Avendel
😍 Thank you for sharing some of the ways this writing touched you! I am truly honored by your reading of this.
Della Driscoll
Wow. Those words hit me! I love this piece of writing x
Zoe
This poem sounds deep and meaningful. Sad and beautiful at the same time 💜
Penny Pinching Ninja
Great poem that really brings some emotion throughout. Always love how words alone can bring feelings out of a person.
Jaya Avendel
That is one of my favorite things about writing! 💖
In mind and out
Have really enjoyed taking a look st your poems. You have a real way with words.
Jaya Avendel
Thank you! Your writing is beautiful so I am honored you enjoy what I write.
In mind and out
The feeling is mutual. Thank you!
davidjhopcroft
There is a sharpness to the first lines that bring out your point, and some firmness of resolve at the end. A nice poem and I like the way you have constructed it 🙂
Jaya Avendel
Thank you! I find poems with a little bit of angst and truth in them are often difficult to put together but come out beautifully.