Petal Due
The best way to have an accident
is to bleed over the sunflowers until the
petals are crimson and the dirt beneath you is
cool with shed dreams and rebirth.
This way you pay for your mistake in the
eyes of world.
Photo by Autumn Mott Rodeheaver
© Jaya Avendel. All Rights Reserved.
Giulia
Very powerful. It’s amazing how few words can send such a powerful message. Beautiful.
Jenny in Neverland
Crikey this is sad and powerful, maybe one of your best in my opinion x
Aspen Hite
Holy cow! My chest heaved reading that! Total word porn. 👏
Jaya Avendel
Thank you ever so much, Aspen! I love that this piece connected with you.
D. Wallace Peach
My thoughts, like Lisa’s Notebook’s comment, went to Ukraine and Russia. A powerful poem, Jaya. Death, pain, and perhaps repentance and a rebirth.
Dominic Alapat
A profound poem with beautiful imagery! I also love your take on society in this line: ‘This way you pay for your mistake in the eyes of world’.
Jaya Avendel
That ending line is my favorite! Love that you loved it.
coalblack
A fascinating notion here, of a kind of elemental balance having to be restored.
Thanks for the visit and comment at The House of Pain. 🙂
Cindy Georgakas
A powerful write with beautiful imagery Jaya! 💖💖💖
readandreviewit1
This is such a powerful read! The imagery of the blood and the petals is really interesting and I love what you managed to achieve through just six lines – it’s amazing! Thank you so much for sharing.
Jaya Avendel
Thank you for sharing this lovely read!
Annabel
This is a such a sublime treat from a beautiful feminine pen!! 💖 Thank you for sharing!
Ananda
❤❤❤❤❤ You are amazing
Lauren
Short but powerful Jaya! This writing creates great imagery! Thank you for sharing Jaya!
Lauren
Lisa's Notebook
Your analogy with sunflowers made me think of Ukraine. We can only hope that the Ukrainians win and that Russia will experience a rebirth in defeat without Putin and his mafia gang.
Jeff Flesch
A gorgeous write, Jaya, speaking to me of the visceral shedding of the past, those things that we think we need to do, and the rebirth that awaits as we bleed these previously held dreams to make space for new ones. Lovely write!
Jodie | That Happy Reader
This is so powerful Jaya, but makes me a little sad. Thanks for sharing it.
Her Digital Coffee
Wow! This is a short yet incredibly powerful piece. The way you can convey so much in just 6 lines is masterful. Thank you so much for sharing Jaya, this is beautiful.
Kelly Diane
This is such a raw and powerful piece
Lamittan Minsah
This imagery is sharp and concentrated, Jaya. Timonists deserve such a suffering. Quite visceral and evocative. 💗💗
Jaya Avendel
Thank yo deeply, Lamittan!
Jordanne || Ofaglasgowgirl
Very beautifully written. I just had to read a few times as it all sunk in and I love the visuals it brought fourth in my mind. Thank you for sharing with us.
Lamittan Minsah
Indeed it is, feel most welcome. 🙏
Daphny Aqua
This one leaves one speechless, it is way beyond words ❤️
SelmaMartin
Oh my! Have no accidents, please. Sunflowers are yellow. But your words and your mind: amazing. Don’t stop. xoxo I bless you
Jaya Avendel
Thank you, Selma!
Frank @ Beach Walk Reflections
Beautifully done …. very deep and worth pondering.
Keep Calm & Drink Coffee
An intense, pure, sanguine image of rebirth. Like a painting in nature.
Thank You Jaya!
K.Hartless
Huzzah. Love the bloody sunflowers and the repentance that comes only from a sacrificial drip.
Jaya Avendel
Thank you for your interesting read!
paeansunplugged
Jaya, this is incredibly impactful with such raw beauty! ❤️
Infinite Living
Oh this is stunning gorgeous beautiful, deeply.
Michele Lee
Jaya! What you have conveyed in six lines is unbelievable – emotions, confession, raw beauty, repentance, forgiveness, dramatic imagery… Outstanding!
Jaya Avendel
Thank you, Michele!
Ingrid
Beautifully put, Jaya!