Uncanny Love
Challenge me, I dare you
Try to put me under the radiant glare of your
Microscope and I will burn your eyes.
Under seven layers of
Skin you toned with the pads of your fingers
Your skull is rotting at its corners
I see it in your teeth when your
Twilight rose lips peel apart.
You questioned me
Questioned the fragment of yourself you denied
You were fifteen; I was three months younger
One week undone, but
You were the mistake I learned from.
Inspired by Sammi Cox’s Weekend Writing Prompt: question in 84 words.
Photo by Koala
schmitztimo
Wow, this is astonishing!
Daphny Aqua
Damn Jaya I am loving this and your closing line ‘You were the mistake I learned from’ from was lit 🔥
Jaya Avendel
Thank you deeply, Daphny!
Daphny Aqua
You’re most welcome Jaya!
aimsysantics
Another wonderful piece! I don’t know if it is because it is Halloween, but I get the spooky vibes from this one!
Thanks for sharing another brilliant piece Jaya!
Aimsy xoxo
Alicia from Nourishing Foods.Tasty Meals
Great poem. Full of emotions Jaya. 💗 Thanks for posting this.
A Sustainably Simple Life
I feel like I was taken on a familiar emotional journey through this piece–the feistiness of self protection, the layers of pain and hurt, and the lessons and acceptance that have come from simmering in regret. I am in love with the image of “put me under the radiant glare of your / Microscope and I will burn your eyes.”
Jaya Avendel
🙃 Love the way you read this! Thank you for sharing.
lilbooktopus
Love the poem and the photo! This is amazing!
Ali Duke (@weirdoA)
This is a great piece of writing, you can really feel the emotion of it.
Raji (@journeyintofantasy)
This is a powerful and thought provoking piece. Thanks for sharing, Jaya!
Corinne
Stunning imagery here, as always!
Corinne x
Her Digital Coffee
I love the imagery in this poem. This is really powerful and moving. I also like the image you paired with this piece, it’s fitting. Thank you for sharing!
I'm All Booked Up YA
Great and powerful poem. You did an exceptional job with imagery, especially with the microscope.
Giulia
I really love this one Jaya. The way you weave words together always takes my breath away. Such a powerful piece.
Soffy
‘but
You were the mistake I learned from.’
This really hit home, Jaya. Yet another perfect poem. Thank you for sharing.
Michele Lee
The speaker is a controlled force – the most powerful kind. A quiet fierce strength. Outstanding poem, Jaya.
Jaya Avendel
Thank you, Michele! I love that the strength you felt was of the quiet kind. 🙂
Michele Lee
Always a pleasure, with each read, which is always more than once! 😄
Unwanted Life
This was such an interesting and emotional poem. Given that skulls don’t have corners, I was wondering what you were going for with the line “Your skull is rotting at its corners” as I’m likely misunderstanding it
Jaya Avendel
Not at all! I used the line as poetic metaphor for how rot sometimes begins outside of the body and works its way inwards.
paeansunplugged
Love the powerful voice of the verse and the underlying seething anger.
Nicci
A very thought provoking poem with some great imagery throughout! It’s my first time seeing your blog and I’m loving your style!
Jaya Avendel
Thank you so much, Nicci!
Kelly Diane
Wonderful poem. You’ve included so much description in so little words. Its really effective.
GHLearner
Let’s hope both have learned from it. Great imagery.
Jenny in Neverland
Wow okay this was a powerful poem and nowhere near what I was expecting from the title!
Jaya Avendel
😊 Love that I managed to surprise you.
Telina
This is such an emotive piece! Thanks for sharing 🙂
Shell-Shell's🐚tipsandtricks
Great expression of emotion into words. Outstanding writing!
~Michelle
https://michellescrazybusylife.net
Ingrid
A poem of astounding imagery and immense emotional strength, Jaya!
Jaya Avendel
Thank you, Ingrid!
Ingrid
You’re welcome Jaya!
Dominic Alapat
This is a raw and disturbing poem, which carries a lot of anger and pain. Though, it ends with a lesson learned from a bad experience.
Jeff Flesch
I got something quite different from this poem. Sadness and a radiating furry for something that is left unwritten. The furry in the words is dripping for me, and I appreciate you creating such deep emotion in this piece, Jaya. Fantastic writing.
Jaya Avendel
Thank you, Jeff, for sharing the amazing way you read this!
Jeff Flesch
You’re most welcome, Jaya! Reading you is always such a pleasure.
Merry
“You were the mistake I learned from.” Love this line! Always love your writing, Jaya 😀
ivor20
Young love .. we live and learn …
barbaraleaver
Very much a piece that is in tune with teenage years and memories of senior school!
summer with monika
“The fragment of yourself you denied…“ your writing is wisdom and enchantment, every time