Tragedy
Dancer on small feet
Anorexic silhouette
Planets are her breasts.
Inspired by Eugi’s Weekly Prompt ‘Swirling’
Photo by Jaakko Kemppainen on Unsplash
Dancer on small feet
Anorexic silhouette
Planets are her breasts.
Inspired by Eugi’s Weekly Prompt ‘Swirling’
Photo by Jaakko Kemppainen on Unsplash
Eugi
Wow! This is brilliant, Jaya!
Artist/Poet_JayMoraShihadeh
Fiddleheads! love this,great haiku.
Dominic Alapat
Your skill as a poet is so evident in these three lines! Such powerful imagery and such a marvellous flow of words! Superb poem!
Jaya Avendel
Thank you so much, Dominic! I loved writing this haiku and am delighted you found it powerful.
Ruth| Ruthiee loves Glamour
I really love how you have a way with words. I love how your poems resonate with things that happen in life and how they seem so real. This poem was really it for me. I don’t know but this poem brought so many pictures and thoughts to my mind. There’s a lot of scenarios I thought of after reading this and if I start writing everything that came to my mind after reading your poem, I might end up writing the longest comment you’ve ever seen haha. I loved this tho. I love how you could express so much with just three lines. 💗
Jaya Avendel
Thank you, Ruth, for your incredible words and musing over this piece! I am delighted three lines said so much to you. <3
Raji (@journeyintofantasy)
So few words, yet so powerful and the imagery is really vivid! Thanks for sharing!
katieemmabeauty
Short, but powerful! x
Lindsey
So much power in just a few words. Another fantastic one.
Jessica Khater
I loved it. It’s amazing how simple words put together, create such a deep meaning. I admire the courage in your writing:)
Michele Lee
Jaya, I value your unique and courageous writing voice.
If I have never mentioned… your blog/website is gorgeous.
Jaya Avendel
Thank you, Michele! Your appreciation means the world to me. 🥰
barbaraleaver
Wonderful Haiku! Emotive and evocative.
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Della Driscoll
This piece of writing is amazing! I love the power in it x
Corinne
This is beautiful. Makes me miss writing.
Corinne x
Merry
Beautiful and yet so powerful! You’ve done well, as always Jaya 🙂
bournemouthgirl
This is a very powerful piece that depicts a very vivid image. Thank you for sharing your post Jaya.
Karen
I loved how the poem creates a lot a deep emotions from just 3 lines but what I enjoyed the most is how it got me thinking about what it could mean.
• I pictured a tall ballerina & the agony/pain they might be feeling
• But then I also thought of flowers swaying in the wind(reffering to dancing in the wind). Or that life that they have in their seeds( “planets at her breast)
And I’m still thinking about what it means, which is pretty powerful.
It’s a fantastic poem & thank you for sharing!!
Karen x
Jaya Avendel
Wow, Karen, I am so deeply grateful for your sharing of the way you read this! I love the different/connected images it brought to mind!
Anika
Love the deep emotion created in just three lines. You can sense the hollowness in them but it still feels like a complete poem. Beautiful!
Anika | chaptersofmay.com
glowsteady
I’m getting the sadness from this but I can’t put my finger on why which is making this all the more interesting for me to try and decipher. With a ballerina dancing around the thoughts in my head. Which I guess is a lot for three lines, a very powerful piece! x
Jaya Avendel
Thank you! I enjoy that this piece both fulfilled you and left room for deciphering.
Keep Calm & Drink Coffee
Haiku bringing a word bigger than the breast planets.
I feel all the essence of the impossibility to balance.
Small feet can’t bear the weight.
Anorexic silhouette is the shape of internal hurt.
Suffering.
Embrace dear Jaya
Jaya Avendel
Thank you for your poetic words!
Lisa's Notebook
You can feel the sadness seeping from your words. As another commenter said, you don’t need many words to make an impact. Just the right words. Brilliant, thank you, Jaya.
Jenny in Neverland
This is really powerful. It doesn’t take many words to make an impact sometimes! x
positiveyetcynical35
Oh, I love haikus! This is such a beautiful post. Look forward to seeing more from you x
Nancy
This is a perfect depiction of what tragedy can look like. Small feet are hard to manage when it comes to balancing. Even having breasts that big will cause back injuries! The key is balance. Thanks for sharing this deep piece!
Nancy ✨ mdrnminimalists.com
Jaya Avendel
The name of this piece was a bit elusive, so I am delighted you read it so deeply and appreciate the key need for balance!
meredithdent
So short but so powerful! You invoke such distinct images in so few words.
quirkymoms486
Very powerful Jaya! Painted a perfect picture with your words
Lucy
Beautifully, beautifully expressed. It’s powerful in its gravity and tragic. Reading this the first time, it takes your breath away in the profundity and hinted melancholy. Just wow.
Jaya Avendel
Thank you, Lucy, for sharing the power of your thoughts reading this! 😍
-Eugenia
Amazing and profound piece. The image captured beautifully.
Jaya Avendel
Thank you! The image brought it home for me too.
-Eugenia
You’re welcome!
aimsysantics
Short but super powerful! I can imagine a ballerina with these words, but then in another sense tall wildflowers or weeds swaying in the Spring breeze ready to release their seeds. I love how your words can prompt lots of different meanings!
Another fab post Jaya!
Aimsy xoxo
Aimsy’s Antics
Jaya Avendel
OO, the unique way this represented both a dancer or the wild of spring nature makes hearts in my eyes! Thanks so much for sharing your reading. 🌺
Ingrid
A beautifully captured image (in words). And yes, it is a tragic condition.
Jaya Avendel
😄 Thanks kindly, Ingrid!
minametry84
Perfect. I am looking forward to reading your poems everyday. You have done well
eob2
Very profound haiku, Jaya.