Blue Dusk
Crushed rose petal and gemstone
Wicked snap of jasmine
Summertime sadness wreaks melody
Gloved hands rake through blue dusk.
She breaks against you
White lace tied in French knot
Threads of desire burst from her mouth.
It is dusk that seeps through pores of
Shining skin and pervades your being like music
Torn from the heartache of forever.
Listen to the rhythm of her body
Intentionally lose yourself to her touch
Reset the silver clock dials
Preserve her twilight beauty in immortal wine.
She lingers on in
Silk skirts laced with bramble tears and
Crimson slipper. Swallow the desire in her eyes
Watch her turn to salt spray foaming with blue dusk and
Rejoice in her final celebration of life.
Photo by Markus Laanisto
Aspen Hite
‘Preserve her twilight beauty in immortal wine.’… this line took my breath away. Another beautiful poem! 💜
Raji (@journeyintofantasy)
Beautiful poem Jaya! I love the imagery
Richard Ankers
Wow! Felt that one. 🙂
Lauren
A beautiful poem Jaya! The image you have shared also helps with the imagery. Your words are so powerful. Thank you for sharing your poem Jaya!
jonicaggiano
A truly beautiful piece filled with all kinds of emotion, desire is the one that really shines and I love the way you ended this piece as well. Hugs, Joni
Daphny Aqua
This truly is a work if art Jaya, such a magnificent imagery. ❤️
Ryan Biddulph
Hi Jaya,
Beautiful poem. I love that featured image too.
Ryan
theusedlife
Such vivid natural imagery. A pleasure to read.
alimackin2013
Oh this is lovely and reminds of the end of summer at the beach staying until dusk. Good job!
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Dawn Pisturino
Lovely imagery!
Ingrid
‘Torn from the heartache of forever’ – what a beautiful phrase! Lovely writing Jaya.
Jenny in Neverland
This poem was so immersive, Jaya!
Soffy
Oh Jaya you’ve outdone yourself again! This was beautiful!
Jeff Flesch
I adore how you take sadness and melancholy, and turn them upside down, disrupting notions of those concepts and of the concept celebration. Gorgeous imagery, amazingly engaging, and so beautiful. Awesome write, Jaya!
Jaya Avendel
Thank you so much, Jeff!
ellegracedeveson
I’m forever in awe of your amazing work. I say this everytime but your are SO talented. Your words give me goosebumps, its always so beautifully written. Thank you so much for sharing this with us lovely Xo
Elle – ellegracedeveson.com
Her Digital Coffee
I’m in awe of your work and this has got to be my favorite piece from you by far! It’s so descriptive and I can feel every single emotion from this. Thank you for sharing Jaya, beautiful work as always!
Jaya Avendel
Wow, thank you so much! What a fabulous read.
Michele Lee
The imagery is intoxicating! Many gorgeous phrases and your poem had a calming effect on me. Lovely work, Jaya. 💞
readandreviewit1
This is such a beautiful and haunting piece, you have such a way with words! I think the line I was most drawn to would have to be “Summertime sadness wreaks melody”, it’s something that really spoke to me as this summer just hasn’t been what I thought it would be – it’s been incredibly tough so far. Thank you so much for sharing x
Jaya Avendel
I so love that you share the lines that connected with you the most! Thank you, and here is to a melodic summer.
Lisa
Beautiful writing as always, Jaya. These lines are my favourites, “It is dusk that seeps through pores of Shining skin and pervades your being like music,” and “Watch her turn to salt spray foaming with blue dusk and Rejoice in her final celebration of life.” So evocative!
Jaya Avendel
Thank you so much, Lisa!!
Becky
Not sure why but this was my favourite line – Wicked snap of jasmine – it really spoke to me for some reason. Reading this was like being in a dream. Loved it!
Jaya Avendel
Thank you for this lovely comment, Becky!
barbaraleaver
Ah the vividness of the ocean and speculative thoughts of the life the water lives – lovely!
ivor20
sensationally vivid imagery Jaya that immersed me in emotions of “our” glorious days holidaying by the sea (Port Fairy)
Jaya Avendel
Aww, love that, Ivor!
ivor20
My pleasure Jaya
Cassa Bassa
I was attracted to the title Blue Dusk
Jaya Avendel
Thank you, Cassa!
Cassa Bassa
“like music torn from the heartache of forever” 💚
Keep Calm & Drink Coffee
In this poem I began to immerse myself starting from the title.
The first association of thought with the dusk is something fiery or in any case totally different tones from blue.
Instead, your words lead into an ocean of emotions, as if the color itself took shape.
Jaya Avendel
Thank you for this reflective comment, Claudia!
Jodie | That Happy Reader
Beautiful! Lots of imagery! I really love “…torn from the heartache of forever”.
Julian
This is lovely! Not much of a poetry reader but it definitely paints a very strong picture 💕
Jaya Avendel
Thank you for sharing your thoughts, Julian! I so appreciate it.
Jacqui Murray
Those words will stay with me for a while.
G D Ogilvie
Powerful!
Gabriela Marie Milton
Oh… beautiful poem.
xoxo
Jaya Avendel
Thank you so much, hon!
Gabriela Marie Milton
My pleasure. I am happy I could read and comment. Most of the time I have problems commenting on your site. It worked today.
xoxo